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Finally, he was back in his own clothes, waiting for Jack to come and 'collect' him. His stomach rumbled from avoiding breakfast as well as dinner the night before, and he was getting grumpy with the lack of sustenance. Finally he could hear heavy boots thudding on the sterile floors, and he was on his feet before the Captain could enter the room.

He grinned wide, but faltered when he saw the greyness of Jack's skin and the shadows under his eyes. "Not get much sleep?" he asked.

The Captain shook his head silently.

"C'mon," sighed Ianto, and guided him out of the room. He let himself be lead to the main reception and signed himself out, not waiting to find Doctor Shay to say goodbye. He knew it was rude and out of character for him, but he just couldn't stand the sight of that damned notepad anymore.

Jack put a firm arm around his waist and Ianto returned the hold as they set off together. They relaxed away from each other and walked normally the further from the hospital wing they got. Ianto was semi-relieved to note that the School hadn't fallen apart without him over the past day and a half, though he did feel only slightly annoyed that it hadn't.

"These stairs are gonna be the death of me," groaned Ianto, halfway up and still having to climb.

Jack gave a small laugh. "C'mere!" he grinned, and before Ianto could fully register what was happening, found himself lifted and cradled in Jack's arms.

"Ohhh no, Jack ...." he moaned.

"What?"

"Put me down," he grumbled.

"Why? You hate the stairs."

"I don't need to be carried like a girl!"

He yelped as Jack practically tossed him in the air and flung him over his shoulder. "You're going to do your back in!" he yelled, lauging. "Jack!"

"Shut up. You're supposed to be relaxing," Jack chastised.

"And what are we supposed to do on Thursday night if every movement is painful for you?"

"Fair point," sighed Jack, pausing to put him down. They began their upward climb again. "Ianto?" Jack eventually asked.

"Mm?"

"Why did you never tell me?"

"Tell you what?"

"That you needed medication."

He sensed Ianto tensing as they walked. "It never came up," he settled on saying.

"What about at the hospital when you first came through? They didn't ask you if you needed any medicines?"

"Not that I can recall. It was a while ago."

"And you've just been quietly stressing without them all this time?"

"I've been fine," Ianto insisted.

"You had a breakdown," Jack reminded him.

"I know. I was there," grumbled Ianto, feeling his lungs starting to hurt as they got near the top of the stairs. He groaned as his calves started to burn, and was thankful when they finally reached the end. "I want lifts, and I want them now," he glowered.

Jack laughed, probably not taking him seriously. He lead Ianto down the spiral stairs to his house, shucking his jacket and insisting Ianto take his off too. The Captain yawned and Ianto took pity on him, leading him by the hand to the bedroom.

"When did you last sleep properly?"

"It's not the sleep. It's the stress," Jack sighed as Ianto pushed him onto his squishy bed and started pulling at his boots. "Just think ... this time next week ... we might have to give all this up."

Ianto set his boots aside and crawled up to lie beside him, head on his shoulder. "Never mind that," he sighed. "This time next week we'll be married men."

"Mmmm," Jack agreed. He closed his eyes, then cocked one open. "You're going to be my wife," he smirked.

"No. You're going to be my wife," insisted Ianto with a grin.

"You're the well-dressed eye candy with a penchant for organisation," Jack reminded him.

Ianto smiled to himself at the 'eye candy'. He would never, ever admit to Jack that he loved John Hart calling him that. "So I'm just going to be a trophy wife?" he pouted.

"Ha! So you are going to be the wife!"

"Well, they always say that the wife is dominant in the bedroom," smirked Ianto.

"Like a tiger?" asked Jack, suggestively.

Ianto bit down on the Captain's ear hard enough to give him a little shock. "Like a whore," he whispered. He felt Jack shiver before strong arms shoved and pushed until Jack was lying on top of him, flush together and comfortably between his legs.

"Mmm I think I'll come to like this arrangement ...." He leaned down and kissed him, using his weight to constrict and pin him to the bed.

Ianto wondered if Jack took the hint that he liked to be called 'whore' in the bedroom. Jack had thus far not once uttered the word, and it was the nearest thing to a term of endearment Ianto would allow.

The Captain slid his hand between them, pushing his fingers into the fabric of Ianto's trousers so that it would put more pressure on his erection, making him hiss and moan into Jack's mouth. "Stop ...." he managed to bring himself to mutter as Jack finally let his mouth free.

"Huh?"

"You need to nap - you're practically grey."

"I'm restless," Jack pouted.

Ianto pushed him off. "Not until our Wedding Night," he chastised.

"Um ... what?"

"We're not having sex again until we're married. You're going to have to be celibate for the next twenty four hours at least."

"But ... we haven't ... since ...."

"I know - it'll be hard for you. But you'll appreciate it all the more when we get to do it again."

Jack groaned, stretching out on the bed. Ianto rolled onto his side, rubbing the Captain's belly. Jack sighed sleepily. "Mmm. Maybe a nap won't hurt," he pondered, then promptly fell unconscious. Ianto smiled, watching him for a while before falling asleep himself.




~*~*~*~




"Mr. Turnbull ... just ... give Jack the purple and silver two-tone, and me the red and gold," Ianto finally decided. "Don't let me change my mind."

Mr. Turnbull laughed. "But you would look good in the silver and purple two-tone shirt."

"But red is my colour - and Jack in red looks ... strange."

"Then don't have the red?"

Ianto kneaded his forehead, Jack lounging in the chair in the corner of his living room while his wedding clothes were decided by his wife-to-be.

"Maybe he could have blue and silver? I could have purple? The Captain's favourite colour is blue, after all ...."

"Hmm. Yes - I would think blue is his colour," agreed the tailor. "And while red is yours, it is not the colour for a husband to wear on his wedding day."

"Well, you know best," smiled Ianto. "Purple for me; blue for the Captain."

"With the silver two-tone," finished Mr. Turnbull. "You say you don't want jackets?"

"No point having waistcoats to cinch in our middles if you can't actually see them. And this way the shirts are shown off to full effect."

"Mmm," agreed Mr. Turnbull. "but what about other occasions?"

"Other occasions?"

"You're only planning on wearing them once?"

"Where I come from, you're only supposed to wear them on the day itself, sorry. Okay then - we'll have jackets."

"What waste!" laughed Mr. Turnbull. "Anyway - you have your cut and colours chosen, so I shall begin work on these right away and deliver them first thing tomorrow morning."

"You're a miracle worker," smiled Ianto.

"Sometimes a tailor has to be," sighed Mr. Turnbull. "Right! I must be off!"

He gathered up his papers and swatches and made his way out of the living room, up the spiral stairs and through Jack's office, Ianto a step behind to see him out.

"Ahh!" sighed Mr. Turnbull, almost proudly. "It must be so exciting for you - your last night as a boy. Tomorrow, you become a man, and your youth is all but gone ...."

Ianto stared at him. "Gone?"

Mr. Turnbull laughed. "In my culture, Mr. Jones, you are a child until you are married. And tonight is your last night as a child - shall you use it wisely?"

"I ... I suppose I should try ...."

Ianto waved goodbye to Mr. Turnbull, keeping his words in mind, and shut the door to the office again, locking it and wandering back downstairs with two mugs of strong coffee. He set Jack's on the coffee table before him, settled himself on the couch with a heavy sigh and tipped his head back, eyes closed, relaxing.

Jack moved and sidled closer, resting a head on his shoulder. "How are you feeling?"

"Good," Ianto smiled. He squirmed as Jack reached into his pocket, and produced the little brown bottle of blue pills Doctor Shay had prescribed. "What are they for?" he asked.

"Forgot I had them in my pocket and they were digging in my side," sighed Jack, putting them on the coffee table as far away as he could be bothered reaching. "But ... I think you and I need to talk ...."

"What about?"

"Well ... I've thought of a place to start," Jack suggested.

"Oh?" Ianto raised his head to look at him.

"Why don't you tell me why you were on those things to start with?"

Ianto bit his lip and glanced away. "I ... uh ...." He cleared his throat. "Um ... okay. Well...."

He started with Canary Wharf, and the Cybermen. Then Lisa, and what he did. The cannibals; shooting Owen; thinking he'd forever lost Jack, Jack leaving - then coming back. He told him about John Hart - and was a little peeved to find that the Captain was still visited by him - and Gray. Owen's death and resurrection and the tortured aliens of the Pharm; Pearl and the Ghostmaker and the one little boy they were able to save. Finally, he spoke openly about the effect Toshiko and Owen's deaths really had on him, despite how he had had to hold it together for Jack and Gwen, really only getting to mourn in private.

Jack was quiet a moment. "And then," he pondered. "after all that ... this happens ...."

"Mmm," agreed Ianto. "Why couldn't it have been Gwen?" he joked.

"Mmm," nodded Jack. "At least she'd have had Rhys ...."

"I was joking," Ianto told him with a small laugh. "I ... I don't think I would change this. It's been hard but ... I think I'm adjusting."

"You'll be happy here?"

"I think I very nearly already am."

"... and you won't need the medications?"

"I already don't need them," huffed Ianto.

Jack bit his lip. "But if you did, you'd tell me, right?"

Ianto nodded, though he didn't mean it. "Now! I need to be getting back home. It's late, and Rhys will have been expecting me back a while ago ... I hope he's not angry ...."

"If he is, you can set me on him," Jack offered, helping him to his feet. "... or you could just stay here?"

"Can't sleep in the same house the night before the ceremony," Ianto grinned, and Jack pouted. "S'a pity we never got to have Stag Do's though."

"We'll find a strip club after the ceremony, if you're desperate," offered Jack, innocently. Ianto gave a small laugh and rolled his eyes. "I also know a rather ... easy ... guy who has some rather ... exciting tentacles ...." he added, with suggestive eyebrows.

"Sounds delightful ...." agreed Ianto, a little sarcastically.

"Don't knock it 'til you've tried it. I bet you'd love it ... Hey! For your wedding gift, how about I-"

"Wedding gift?" Ianto cut him off, eyes wide. "We're doing gifts?"

"Well ... yeah ... you ... didn't think of ... y'know?"

"Hahahahaha," laughed Ianto, trying not to sound nervous. "Got you! I ... uh ... I have something in mind," he lied.

Jack grinned. "Like what?"

"Just ... something ... erm ... yeah."

Jack grinned wider. "Hey - did you ever get anywhere with that puzzle box?"

Ianto cleared his throat. He'd had that bastard thing for months now. "No," he scowled. "I found it an insanely cruel present."

"I wondered why you never, ever spoke about it," sighed Jack.

"Is the box itself the gift? Can I just smash it open?"

Jack smiled softly. "Be patient with it," he advised.

"I have been," grumbled Ianto. "Anyway ... I need to ... go home."

Jack offered to walk him back, but he declined, wandering through the twilit corridors and smiling with the precision of the timed lights as they flickered on. He hesitated by a window to gaze out into the garden, pushing open the pane to let the cold air into his lungs. He hadn't been outside for days ....

He tried to push the window open further, but this high up it only opened a fraction to comply with health and safety regulations. Biting his lip and checking his watch, he decided that a quick stroll wouldn't hurt. Climbing back up the stairs would, but at least he only had to go to the flat and not the offices on the topmost floor.

Mr. Turnbull's words came back to him: "Tonight, is your last night as a child - shall you use it wisely?"

He decided to see how fast he could run down the stairs without jumping, stopping himself at the halfway point and taking a surreptitious look around. Last night as a boy, he decided, and swung his leg over the bannister. He checked to make sure there was still nobody about, bent forward, loosened his grip and let himself slide down.

The corners would bruise his inner thighs, but he didn't care: he hadn't done this for years. He let himself laugh as he slid towards the last flight of stairs - the longest, leading straight into the lobby. He picked up speed, flew off the end and landed as gracefully as a cat. He stood upright, adjusted his tie and glanced around.

He cleared his throat, spotting a middle-aged woman with two young boys, watching him. "Good evening, ma'am," he greeted, the boys watching him agape and the woman glaring at him sourly. He quickly slid out of the front doors and began to wander towards the back of the building and the stretch of gardens. The grass out front needed mowing, he noted - not that it mattered too much, as hardly anyone ever came by the front entrance.

He stopped.

His instincts were prickling.

He hadn't had a gun for months, but still his muscle-memory reached for the back of his waistband. To disguise the movement he hitched his trousers up, then carried on wandering along, listening as carefully as he could to any form of movement.

A small clump of grass shook to his right, and Ianto froze, turning towards it. "Who's there?" he barked, authority in his tone.

No answer.

Taking a deep, calming breath, he ignored his constricting chest and fear-beating heart pounding in his ears, edging forwards. He didn't know if this was a good idea or not - chances were it was just kids hiding out past their curfew or ... a large mouse.

The mouse stared up at Ianto, and Ianto breathed a sigh of relief. He then tensed again when he realised what the mouse was sat on. He rushed back inside, opened an emergency panel and pulled out a torch - which boasted to him that it had the 'power of a million candles' - and ran back outside. The mouse was gone, but as he flicked on his torch Ianto saw that he wasn't wrong.

It had been exploring a patch of freshly-turned earth - freshly-turned earth in a vast expanse of green, covered with a mis-matched shade of new turf. Had Ianto not been on high-alert, he probably would have missed it.

Glancing around, checking he was alone, he got on his hands and knees and pulled a little at the grass. It came free, soil and all, in a large square. It was heavy, and solid, as if someone had put wood through it to make a ... door. A trap door. In the ground, and leading to a tunnel. He frowned to himself. There were no tunnels in the grounds on the blueprints ... maybe some kids had dug it for funsies? He wanted to explore the mystery, find out where the tunnel lead ... maybe apprehend a villain ....

Ianto felt like one of the Famous Five.

I'll be Julian, he thought, lowering himself into the hole. Jack is such a Dick. He shone his torch around and grumbled as he realised that while the initial hole was man-deep, he would have to crawl on his hands and knees to follow it. Getting dirty wasn't what he liked doing ... but this tunnel ... it shouldn't be here. And he could always have ginger beer and a shower later ....

Last night as a boy, he reminded himself, and crouched down, tying his tie around his head like Rambo to hold the torch in place by his temple as he crawled. He frowned around him, pausing, moving his head from side to side. The sides of the tunnel were propped up with wooden planks, and looked ... professional. He bit his lip, wondering if he should go back for Jack. His instincts were no longer prickling like they did when danger was ahead, so he decided to carry on. The planks would ensure he wouldn't wind up buried alive, at any rate.

And something had being going on that shouldn't have been.

He crawled along, hoping his suit would forgive him, for about five minutes before the tunnel forked. The fork was well-supported with wooden beams, and judging from the level of damp in the soil and the relative dryness of the planks, Ianto guessed they hadn't been there long at all. One of the forks was sporting darker support beams up the wall and Ianto assumed it was an older tunnel. He decided to go down the newer-looking one, trusting the wood a fraction more and trying to mentally map out where he was in his head. He assumed this fork was leading towards the older, more easterly part of the grounds, and followed it as the damp soil soaked through his knees and made them ache.

The roof of the tunnel finally started getting higher - the floor lower - and eventually Ianto could walk, slightly hunched, for a few meters before turning a sharp corner and finding himself face-to-face half with soil, half with brick, aluminium and concrete foundation. He touched it, frowning, assuming it was the foundations of the School itself. Maybe work was being done that Jack had organised while he'd been with Doctor Shay?

But no ... Jack would have told him and wanted his approval first.

Ianto's instinct told him something was very, very wrong. Using his bare hands, he scraped away more soil from the building in front of him, digging and digging away until he saw that the tunnel did, in actuality, lead straight to a corner.

He frowned. Was the tunnel incomplete? Had it gone off in the wrong direction? Had they meant to hit a corn-

It hit him. It his him so hard it nearly winded him. FUCK, he mentally yelled. On auto-pilot he dropped to his hands and knees crawling as quickly as he could back to the fork. Instead of heading to the exit, however, he hurried down the other tunnel as quickly as he could manage, dreading but almost certain he knew where it would lead.

Similarly to the other tunnel, this one lengthened until he could stand, but there was no wall of aluminium, concrete and brick, only loose soil and debris. Running on adrenalin, he began to dig using his hands, pretty much clawing at the dirt until finally fresh air began to filter through from the other side. He managed to create a man-sized hole, and pulled himself through it, breathing hard and groaning through his aches.

He was exactly where he thought he would be.

The ruined site of the school rooms - right at the edge.

Not caring how dirty his fingers were, he ran them through his hair, staring around him, the enormity of what he had found bearing down on his shoulders. He bit the back of his hand, trying not to panic, using the pain to re-centre himself and focus.

He hastily refilled the hole so that it looked still undiscovered and used the temporary door to get back inside the building. He came across the same woman and children from the lobby on the stairs, and the look he received was even more sour than the last thanks to his shockingly dirty and dishevelled appearance. He ignored her, trying to get up the stairs faster as the lactic acid that built up in his calves made them burn as his thighs began to complain.

Ianto practically crawled up the final flight, dragging himself by his hands up the last few steps. FUCKING LIFTS, he screamed in his head. If it wasn't for those tunnels, I'd HAVE THEM BY NOW!

He was catching his breath enough to stand, when he heard footsteps moving towards him. Piqued, he raised his head, panting. He stared. "It's ... you?"

"Me what?"

"What are you doing ... why are you here? ... what are you doing here?"

"Put two and two together, my love."

"You ... you know what ... what's going ... going on?" he panted, trying to stand up.

"Need help?"

Ianto found himself being tugged to his feet.

"Blimey, you must be unfit. Those stairs almost killed you."

"What the hell do you know about the ... the tunnels?" demanded Ianto.

"Everything."

"Are you ... are you ? ... no ... please no ... not you ... please not you ...."

Ianto was too tired, and his reactions were too slow. He found himself spun around, forced forward a little and winded on the banister of the landing. There was a mouth close to his ear, and he felt something hard shoved into his back.

"Because it will make him mine!" came the hissed reply.

It wasn't until the blade was pulled out that Ianto realised he'd been stabbed.

No longer pinned to the railing, his weight went from under him, and hot wetness seeping through the back of his shirt told him he was bleeding copiously. It hadn't felt like he'd thought being stabbed would - hell, he thought it would feel like when he'd been pierced by shrapnel, or that time Owen's scalpel had to be used to cut open his thigh and pull out that weird bug thing. It had felt like ... being pushed. As if someone had clapped him hard on the back ...

Ianto tried to grip the bars of the banister, unsure whether or not he was alone or in company still. His fingers weakened, and he found himself lying on the floor, waiting for the pain to come and ... help. He needed help.

He tried to turn onto his stomach, but feeling pain lance through the wound in his back he gave up. He tried calling out, but his voice wouldn't work. He felt afraid - truly afraid - and his heart began beating faster, pumping more blood out of his stab wound and killing him quicker. He took advantage of it, pushing the puddle of blood out and hoping against hope someone might see the red liquid dribbling down and come to investigate sooner rather than later - though he doubted he could be saved now.

"Is that blood?" he heard a woman exclaim. Three storeys down, he reckoned. She must be able to see it dripping down. He could hear delicate heels clicking on the steps, and her scream when she saw him. "Oh my ... help!" she yelled. "Help! Mr. Jones has been stabbed!"

She knelt by him, "I don't know if anyone heard," she whispered. "I don't want to leave you but ... I'll run and get help, I will ... I'll run ...."

He couldn't really hear that much anymore, but at the promise of gossip people were drifting up the stairs to see what was going on. They stopped dead, staring at him lying sprawled in his shroud of red. Then the talking started. It escalated - panicked shouts echoing through the hall. Someone ran down the corridor to the Captain's office, knocking frantically on the door until he finally emerged, disgruntled.

"Mr. Jones ...." the lad whispered, pointing down the hall, and Jack saw.

The gathered were silenced by his shout of anguish, watching quietly as he charged down the corridor like a bull. "Ianto!" he yelled, gathering his limp form up in his arms. His skin was pasty and clammy, his suit caked with soil and his eyes were closed. "Ianto ... stay with me ... stay with me ...."

He pressed his fingers to his neck and sagged, cradling him closer as if he was precious. The Captain moved until he was cross-legged, crushing Ianto to him, rocking backwards and forwards as tears poured down his face.

"What happened?" he begged the unresponsive body laid across him. "What happened?"













The End.





(... kidding! I'm not RTD!)







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Date: 2010-02-17 03:55 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] queenfanfiction.livejournal.com
WELL THANK GOD YOU'RE NOT RTD.

*grrs and pokes for more*

Imma going to reread this chappie. Because it was long and I think I got lost, I was so busy trying to figure out WHO STABBED IANTO and IS IANTO GOING TO BE OK and then discovered that neither point was sufficiently resolved. x.x Still. AWESOME CLIFFIE. <3

Date: 2010-02-17 04:13 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] iceshade.livejournal.com
HOLY--! I almost started yelling at my computer, and then I completely lost it and started crying at this:
"Ianto ... stay with me ... stay with me ...."
WHY!?

it was that guy! from the beginning! who was spreading rumors about sleeping with Jack! (or the asshole roommate) or it's Gwen because of the "my love" thing, but I don't really think so.

I do like the long update though... ::joins in the poking::

Date: 2010-02-17 04:13 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] chryssalys
You. Are. Evil! Ohdearohdearohdear.

I can has next part sooooooon?

Date: 2010-02-17 04:22 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kholran.livejournal.com
<--THIS. *bounces for more*

Date: 2010-02-17 04:23 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amuly.livejournal.com
Hurm. Someone who would say blimey. Who would say blimey? My first instinct was Owen, but he's dead. Now I'm thinking John, esp. since you mentioned in this chapter that he still pops in to see Jack every once in a while. Oooo the suspense!
Also, this was a very well-crafted chapter. Like the organization and way it was put together and everything was great.

Date: 2010-02-17 04:29 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] griza.livejournal.com
*pokes*

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Date: 2010-02-17 04:30 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] celstaredflower.livejournal.com
*shuts laptop and kicks it away* YOU are one evil woman.

"Please not you, not you" Till? Vegas is too obvious...Rhys is...huh. You wouldn't do that to Rhys, would you? Little Jack being the "him." Huuuuuuuuuuuh.

I repeat: Evil. Woman.

Date: 2010-02-18 02:16 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] celstaredflower.livejournal.com
*glare* This ending actually gave me nightmares with Ianto dying. So now I'm reading the IM verse to feel better. *pets it*

Date: 2010-02-17 04:47 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] holladay-street.livejournal.com
As I was reading I was trying to figure out what the term would be for a cliff-hanger at the beginning of the chapter. A bungee jump? A suspension bridge?

But . . . nope, still a darn cliffhanger!

Date: 2010-02-17 05:13 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mattiemadison.livejournal.com
wow, you really scared me with the "the end" thing. Wow, this really is truly epic. well worth the wait, as it is made of awesome!

Date: 2010-02-17 05:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] nevercheshire.livejournal.com
oh I missed this verse so much! Wonderful updates.. I'm biting my nails and hanging on the edge of my seat!

Date: 2010-02-17 05:27 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deathbymutation.livejournal.com
I DEMAND SATISFACTION! Or y'know more fic.

Date: 2010-02-17 05:38 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bookflight.livejournal.com
EVVVVVVIL! You are EVIL! And also, I LOVE YOU! And you are AMAZING, SUPERB, BRILLIANT! Ah! Ah! AH!
I somehow managed to scroll to the The End. but not far enough to see the (...kidding! I'm not RTD!) and I actually hypervenilated I was so distraught. All I could think was "NOOOOOO! NOT AGAIN!" Because, seriously, when I saw Day Four the first time, I literally sat in shock for the rest of the episode and had to rewatch it again later because I didn't actually register anything that happened after Ianto had died. (Yeah, I...get a bit too attatched to fictional characters...whatever, Ianto's the BEST!)

Anyways, back on the topic of your SPECTACULAR fic...I absolutely love what you've done here. The suspense, the tension, the actual PLOT. It's beautiful and well-crafted and I can't get over how well you've woven such a complex and meaningful story. I mean, there's political intrigue! How many fics do you get that actually delve into the realm of how government funded organizations struggle to help their intended while dealing with tiny budgets and general apathy? And the displaced time-rift refugees? I always thought that Flat Holm was such an interesting concept that just kind of faded into the background. And here you are incorporating that into this story! And not just as a device to get Ianto into the future, but as a meaningful subplot with lingering consqeunces! AH! I am just so, so, so excited by your fic and I'm going all nerdy over it. Yeah. So, two last comments to leave you with.
1) Little Jack - Such a brilliant concept and what beautiful development of his relationship with Ianto, Captain Jack, and Rhys. His character adds a complexity to the plot without becoming obnoxious or forced. What I mean is, he appears as a dynamic character who I actually want to read about as opposed to a random character whose appearances only serve as contrived plot devices. He's become a real person whose needs and concerns are being met by the plot.
2) Ianto - I am in awe of your characterization. I mean, particullarly in the first part of this latest chapter with his breakdown. His OCD and depression was utterly believable and unnervingly accurate. My dad has problems with OCD and I struggle with it some as well. It rang very true to me that when Ianto felt he had lost control he could no longer deny the compulsion. His refusal to take meds or talk to the doctor also seemed very true to character.

Oh man. Now that I've rambled on so much....I LOVE THIS FIC! PLEASE END THE SUSPENSE SOON (but not too soon!) and tell us what's become of darling Ianto and his mysterious attacker!

Date: 2010-02-17 05:39 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bettathnbarbie.livejournal.com
Hey, first fic comment from my sparkly new LJ acct! So... Wow! Wow! Wow!

That ending brought tears to my eyes. The other place I almost lost it was, Jack was blinking back tears. "I ... You ... you said you loved me. That time ... when...." .
*wimper* Poor Jack. He's been through so much, and he has been so understanding with Ianto's OCD (dear God, you'd think after 6 frickin' billion years we'd finally make meds that work!) and now Ianto's dying on him (nearly, coz you aren't RTD, but Jack doesn't know that). *wimper some more*

And who is the nasty, tunneling, building-collapsing Ianto-stabber???

Date: 2010-02-17 06:05 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] doves-wing.livejournal.com
"Pfft. If I've learned anything about doctors it's that they don't know anything about people," Ianto waved off his concern. "Especially not psychologists."

Too right. >_> Er. No offense to psychologists? =D

Oh the suspense. That's evil. Sounds like... oh whatshisname... he was a problem in the beginning until Jack got Ianto out of the bunkers. Hmm. Might have to go back and re-read.

... unless it's Rhys talking about Giacomo being his. But that strikes me as insanely unlikely.

Date: 2010-02-17 06:10 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] elanor12.livejournal.com
Oh my! Thank God you're not RTD!!!!

Who is it?? At the beginning, I thought about the guy from the start, who wanted to be with Jack, but he was just a petty bastard. I don't think he's a killer...

I have no idea, but the fact you've mention Hart earlier in the chapter...um...

More! More! More! More! More! More! More! More! More!

Date: 2010-02-17 06:18 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] elanor12.livejournal.com
But Wait! Hart doesn't say "Blimey"...the only one who could say 'blimey' (except maybe Rhys, but you wouldn't do that), the only character in the Whoniverse that I heard say 'blimey' is, and he was there when the school collapse, and he's still around and...no, he wouldn't do that!

Maybe, maybe Hart would say it, by trying to be sarcastic but...argh! Woman! Such suspense!

I'm pretty sure I'll try to solve this in my sleep now!

P.S. I'm just curious, but how long is that monster chapter?
Edited Date: 2010-02-17 06:20 am (UTC)

Date: 2010-02-17 01:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] a-silver-story.livejournal.com
12,661 words. Joyful!

Date: 2010-02-17 07:00 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rosy5000.livejournal.com
GAH! You love cliff-hangers, don't you? *pouts* That's just EVIL! But I trust you that Ianto will be just fine.

Though, it's going to bug the hell out of me till we find out who stabbed him! Grrr!!!

Date: 2010-02-17 07:28 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] lone-star-woman.livejournal.com
Eeeek! What a cliffhanger. But I'm glad you're not RTD. *waits for everything to be okay*

Great chapter. You dealt with Ianto's breakdown well -- with the stress from the wedding, Rhys's reaction, the cutlery! Great stuff.

Date: 2010-02-17 10:28 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] zsazsa4168.livejournal.com
Thank you for the further deliciousness. Although, in a sense, you started this chapter with a cliffie and ended it WITH THE SAME CLIFFIE. *shakes fist* Silver!

I like the intrigue. I worry about Rhys. I am totally in love with Giacomo. Interesting that big Jack, who hasn't been the best adult in this 'verse, is managing to think like a grown up these days. Positive influence. And Ianto's breakdown was perfect.

Let's all say a prayer, light some candles, kiss our lucky charms and thank God that you're not RTD. If you were, you would have fucked this story up a long time ago. More please.

Date: 2010-02-17 10:56 am (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
My brain says.. Captain john? Hmm maybe GWEN?

Date: 2010-02-17 12:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jacksgirleen.livejournal.com
Since you're not RTD, I know it's not Rhys - you'd never make someone act so OOC and you're just not that cruel. My bet is the guy from the beginning, who was jealous when Jack picked Ianto instead.

Date: 2010-02-17 01:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] gogo-didi.livejournal.com
Oh no no! I need the next part now! But I'll wait...

Oh, and: He rushed back inside, opened an emergency panel and pulled out a torch - which boasted to him that it had the 'power of a million candles' Rhod Gilbert reference? Love it :-)

Date: 2010-02-17 02:26 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] hellestump.livejournal.com
Who the f**k was that?

You are one evil woman you know that? Brilliant, but evil never the less.

You took a couple of years of my life with that The End bit. Don't do that again please.

More, more, more, more, more, more!!!

Date: 2010-02-17 04:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] londas.livejournal.com
Come on !!!!
You can´t stop at this point !!!!

Sometimes you´re driving me crazy with your cliffhangers.

Great work and amazing update

Date: 2010-02-17 05:15 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] franalan.livejournal.com
Oh no! I nearly had a heart attack when I saw the The End!

Date: 2010-02-17 06:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] angelkitty101.livejournal.com
OMG! Thank gods you're not RTD (or I would have to hunt you down and lock you in a lift and persuade you to change it)

Can't wait for more! What a cliff hanger!

Epic Chapter Is Epic

Date: 2010-02-17 06:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] magicmalcolm.livejournal.com
OhGODyes, I LOVE A GOOD WHODUNNIT!!!

*Places Detective Cap firmly on head*

Time...to ponder!

Jack is such a Dick

I misread that as "Jack has such a dick," and promptly spent five minutes giggling. Ah, I hope I never grow up. :)

Date: 2010-02-17 07:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cen-sceal.livejournal.com
Wish I could be coherent, but evil cliffie killed brain cell...
Lovely, tightly woven story, but it's got me on the edge of my seat shaking my poor laptop for more

Date: 2010-02-17 08:58 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] michael-the-car.livejournal.com
Blimey?

Can't be Rhys, he'd say 'Bugger me'

Blimey??

That sounds like the Doctor to me.

Date: 2010-02-17 11:38 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] junoharkness.livejournal.com
this was brilliant. i knew it would be a good clif hanger. i really wish i was able to stay up later last night but i couldnt. cant wait for more!

Date: 2010-02-18 06:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dawns-wings.livejournal.com
Dear lord that was an awful place to stop! Actually, I don't think I could have chosen it better myself. ;D

I can't wait for the next chapter. Who was it??! Dying to keep reading.

Date: 2010-02-18 09:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hab318princess.livejournal.com
argh! I so hope Ianto makes it!

Date: 2010-02-21 04:05 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] firefly-124.livejournal.com
Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaargh! No, you can't leave it there! Why did I pick now to read all of this and not after the next chapter goes up? *tears hair* *shakes laptop to see if next chapter falls out*

More please? *bats eyelashes*

Date: 2010-02-22 10:35 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] delennbr.livejournal.com
Wow, a lot to read at work, yay :D :D

Date: 2010-02-22 11:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] delennbr.livejournal.com
omg omg omg, you're evil, but I love you.
And, omg, I need more, and I need Ianto safe!!!!!!!!!

Date: 2010-02-26 11:52 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] i-own-ianto.livejournal.com
Omg he got stabbed!

But it
is
so
exciting!

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